Akai no setsujoku Manga

So this has been dead for a couple of days. What's happening with the story fr the father? Answer?

Honestly, I'd say I don't really have a lot of ideas for this one.... sorry (think I used them all for the girl's story )
But I think what you said Aang is a good start. Just need peeps to add ideas on that and construct something interesting.

And for the prototype's draw... well I thought you Guillx wanted to do it so I'll let you work on that

huummm.... Hello!? Anybody???
Now I understand why this story is soooo long to finish

I did one a while ago, ill give it to aang to upload it while I make an other one
( the one I did was just an idea for the prototype's armor, his face and hair will be different)

My most sincere apologies for not being on as often as usual. I wanted to drop by and see how everything was going. It's good to see that we have some new members.

yup

OK then... till Guillx finishes the draw for the prototype, we could give to someone the task to write the summary of the stories of the characters (the girl, the prototype and the father) and post the final version on the forum. I know that we haven't talked much about the stories of the two guys but we need to finish this or we'll never come up with anything. Any voluntary?

Next, we could distribute the roles (since we won't do a manga but only role playing) and create another topic to start the "adventure". Oh and also.... we'd prolly need to find a name to all this 'cause I'm not sure "The Adventure" sounds pretty cool

somewhat i think she's right, lol!!! "The adventure"..... yeah ok, well i don't have any ideas for names and it's not really my "domain"(if you know what i mean)

Oh and sorry guillx, I -well mostly we-forgot to bring the drawing at my house to scan it.It's gonna be up soon!

Another idea if all else fails: We could find some pictures of characters online and use them as the individuals in the story.

Well this could work if we don't come up with drawings for the important characters. At the moment we only have the girl... but if you guys really want to finish all this, we can just forget this draw I did and choose pictures on internet for our characters.

I still think though that it would be more interesting to have our own characters but if your priority is to put an end to the story so we can start the writing, well go for it

Oh! and by the way, is my draw ok for the girl? Well I should say: Is that what you'd like the girl to look like? I can do another one if you don't like it, it's absolutly not a problem, hehe. No body really said anything about it regarding the story instead that it was nice, lol. Anyway....

The pictures fine Wells. The issue is that no other concept has been made since then and everything is moving like mollasses. So if you guys don't mind we can use pics off the internet to use as concepts.

Welleys concept of the girl can stay.

Ok well let's start the search for concept pics if everybody agrees.

Umm ok if were acting the story I guess we should establish our characters so welley has her's and aang too ( exept for the pic)
So I guess me and reven should make a character of our own and find a pic too
after that I guess we could start

but to do that I guess we should establish the story's main characters, we got the girl and the guy but who else?
heres some ideas:
Army general ( kinda the bad guy at the beginning, but can vary on sides )
Flying unit lieutenant ( some young guy who gets involved in the story )
A randolm elfish chick who works in the military , somesort of secretary ( ya know what I mean )
and uh... yah help me out XD
so we should fill out every character we make so that way we would have 1 main and a couple of sub characters

For my part I'd like to be the flying unit lieutenant:

Name: Kaito Shigeru
Job/Affiliation: Flying unit Lieutenant
Side: will vary during story, mainly good
Description: some young lieutenant that will somehow mix up the prototype story
I would already know welley's character since shes in my unit , the relation between the characters would be friendly , but formal as I am her '' superior'' but this needs welley's aproval

Ok, wait a minute!!! I'm all mixed up now. If i'm gonna be like the main guy, could we at least finsih the main guy so we could work all on one character at a time and this way it will be easier. As I remember, if i'm correct, we didn't quite finish with the main guy and it's been at bit a while since we continue with ideas. I'm pretty sure i'm not the only one who forgot some details, lol. Sorry if I am, it's just that i got in too many stories since then that I do really remember a lot of details

I've looked up a bit what we were writing about him. So he's uncivilised but he has a very logical sense of thinking, excellent and serious in combat. Guillx brought up the idea of him having dark-blue semi-long hair, but after a vote it finished with red hair, so i guess he has red semi-long hair. His name is Kazuki and his I.D. number is 9..I think. He has the logo of the bad organisation and he has his I.D. number in his eye. So that's about the only things we've got then.

thats right , you gotta finish it , I meant that your characters were chosen not finished XD
so post somesort of character description with a pic when ur decided
then after reven and welly do theirs we can start

Ok well, following Guillx's idea (and btw it's ok with me Guillx )
here's the info for my own char:


Name: Kamiko Takeya (choosed my own first choice for name, since it's my char now )
Job: Flying unit soldier
Side: Good ... I guess
Description: Is mostly trying to discover the truth behind the mystery. Acting formally with people. She could have a best friend that'd be the only person she's close to (if you like the idea, you'll need to find one! )


Damn Aang! I posted a good 200-300 words for the description of my own char, so stop complaining about the fact that yon don't have any for yours and create one! (with da authoritarian mother's voice)
I just mean that if it's your char, well it's also your responsability to work on it. Logic?

ok nice, for ur friend you want a girl or a guy ?

Honestly I don't really care.... lol
Anything would do. If you just find any char you already wanted to include in the story that suits, go for it!

Ok well, by using a pic from the internet, some of the descriptions of Kazuki we,ve worked on isn't gonna work. I don't think I will find specifically a guy with red hair that has an I.D. number in his eye, you see what i mean? lol

lol, try something look alike or maybe draw one lol
um ,for your friend : in the army or not ? like a work friend or a school friend ?

AAAH darn! Why so much questions for a simple friend!? jk

Well I think that he/she (more he.... could be fun, some ideas are coming in my mind now, haha) shouldn't be in the army at all. Well maybe in a lower branch of army, such as a scientist or something, but her friend basicly needs to be the representation of "good" for her, her model, or as if (not that much though). He would be calm, patient, generous and kind (classic portrait, you know what I mean...) but also really intelligent and conprehensive. He doesn't need to be beautiful or anything, just good looking would do (if I want to come up with something intersyting then he needs to be ). He would be the kind not wanting to hurt others directly (physically) but pretty ingenious, he would create new equipment and stuff for the soldiers, etc. (Oh and pretty pationate for his job, really into it, hehe) Indirect fighter I should say.

Sounds good? Don't hesitate to add details if you have ideas as well

Those descriptions seem pretty good, but I'm not too sure what my character should be.. any suggestions?

welll that depends wether you wanna be good, neutral or evil lol( and what sex you wanna be, who knows )
So well the main characters that are remaining could be TEH army general, That elf I talked about, and come to think of it she could have a brother or a relative, maybe that would suit you, but were also missing a goofy character , wich I havent found yet

OOKKK BOYS AND GIRLS!!! LET'S WORK ON THAT THING!!

So now that nobody seems to want to work on the story or that you two guys still don't have your char... well I worked on it myself and completed the main story, came up with 4 different char descriptions to help you Reven and also need your approval or suggestions for some planet and race names.

Here is 4 char def that I did, based on what we needed and what Guillx sugested. You can choose one Reven and add details or change name if you don't like it, or else we can just distribute them as sub-chars.

1.
Name: Ichiru Takeyo
Job: General of the army
Side: <Officialy good> / Unknown
Description: Pretty cold and impatient (even more after the death of his wife). He's always demanding their 100% from his soldiers and can't accept failure. He is always right. His pride is as big as his arms and he could easily be compared to a giant with his muscled body. But under his rough temper, he is an excellent general, loyal to his president till then end.

2.
Name:Mina Honako (change the name if you don't like it, it's just a sugestion)
Job : The general’s personal secretary
Side : Good
Description : Really good looking Sylvek (look at race names below) but kind of naive since she’s coming from another planet which is less developed. She may appear to be a little brainless but she’s pretty creative and imaginative when the general needs help for military tactics. In reality, this is the second reason why he keeps her as his secretary (you can easily guess which one is the first ).

3.
Name : Hideki Taesaka
Job : Scientist in the research department from the army’s laboratories
Side : Good
Description : He’s the youngest scientist due to his very high level of intelligence and logic. He’s the kind of person who doesn’t like physical violence or to use guns and knives and kill people. He prefers to help his community by creating weapons or machines to help soldiers instead of fighting on the battlefield. He’s really serious, profesional and passionate for his job. He also created Wanta during his first year of service as a scientist for the army.

4.
Name : Wanta ( I also came up with Goaky, Binto, Penta, Dooky or Menza)
Job : Hideki’s assistant / Technician in computers
Side : Good
Descritpion : He is sort of a small human, a young boy, who looks a little primitive, with small claws as nails. He is really simple minded, funny and stupid ‘cause he’s acting like a baby but he LOVES women. He’s pretty amazing though when it comes to computers and electronic even if what he creates can sometime be really strange.

Wanta’s pic :

Spoiler:

Ok now I have the story about the planet and the event we’ll be roleplaying all written. While I was writing, I noticed that we didn’t have any specific race names or planet names so I created ones. Now I need your approval or better ideas

Elves race : Sylvek (since in french it’s « Elfes sylvestres »)
Elve’s planet : Kureeno
Main Planet : Oberon
Ennemy’s race : The Raiders (some kind of monsters… you’ll see in the story later, it’s more precise, haha)
Ennemy’s planet : Zakvor
Prototypes : <project Prototera> and they’d be named the Prototeras

Ok now for the Raiders story…. Here it is!!! muhahaha

Zakvor and the Raiders : The planet is covered of dead dried fields of sand, rocks and bones. There’s multiple mountains and volcano as well, which make the traveling for non-raiders impossible instead if their goal is to reach death. There’s also a permanent fog cloud constantly covering every meter of territory which possesses the sent of blood.

Zakvor was once occupated by many species but the main race this planet is now the raiders who eradicated all of them, using them as their food. These monsters aren’t fighting among themselves because the flesh from one of their own kind acts as poison and kill them when they eat it. Raiders are another type of geneticaly modified species but nobody knows who created them and sent them to destroy other species and planets. These raiders are non-human beings without any intelligence or compassion. Their only feeling is hunger. They phisicaly look like monsters with two giant long arms amred with big claws, as their feet are. We can qualify them as deformed killer humans who returned at the primal state, only following their instinct to kill and eat to survive.

Ok so the story would take place in 3102 A.G.. The story’s name could be : The Tales of Oberon. As we develop the story, we could create chapter. Ex :

The Tales of Oberon
I – Age of War
II – Age of Destruction
III – Age of Redemption
IV – Age of Desolation
V – Age of Glory

Anyway, you know what I mean lol. So now I’m only waiting on your comments to continue and create the RP writing section and post the story and RP rules ! So try to create your main char as soon as possible so we can finally start to RP.
Thanks for your cooperation !

is this worth continuing?